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The Battle for Brisingamen (new cover)

The Battle for Brisingamen (new cover)

The Battle For Brisingamen: Freya’s Power
(originally entitled “Brisingamen”)
Harmony Kent

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Greetings, everyone!

On the review of Lunula, you were introduced to Mini Truth, one of our newest TRB members.

In this review of The Battle For Brisingamen, you will gain insight into yet another new member.

Ladies and Gentleman, TRB proudly presents Nikki Vision:

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Nikki’s Vision of Brisingamen

Verdict: Epic story, above and below the waves.

This is a complex tale that begins with Aart, a Dutch fisherman finding an ancient jawbone that scientist Dirck believes could come from Atlantis. When he and his assistant Gemma go missing, they stumble cross a magical world that draws them into a battle between mythological creatures,oil drilling companies and gods and goddesses craving the power of the necklace Brisingamen.

It works well as an episodic fantasy story, and fans of the genre will really enjoy it. It has all the elements to keep readers happy, dwarves, dragons, magic, even some sex, so something for everyone.

However, I found the style of this novel hard to get into. There are rapid shifts in time and location and each chapter transports us into another place, real or magical, where more characters appear. I found it difficult to keep up with the plot because of this, and the constant leaps from magic world to real world, left me confused.

The narrative flow suffered because of the constant shifting from location to location. Any attempt to get to know the characters fully was hampered by the fact that the reader did not spend enough time with them. As a result, I failed to care what happened to them. A lot of the magical characters lacked individual personalities, and their dialogue was often used to explain the plot rather than show it happening through action.

There are some well-described and exciting battles scenes throughout. I think the author excels in physical description and I enjoyed the passages where she let us see the world she has created. I would have liked more of this scene setting.

There are also issues with layout and grammar. The dialogue is not presented correctly on occasions and at one point when we are in the hospital with Aart, the scene is written almost like a play, which seemed unnecessary to me:

(Aart) “Two cappuccinos please.”

(Looking at Zef) “Would you like sugar?”

(Zef looking down at Aart with a minute wink) “Aart, would you like sugar with that?”

(Aart looking at the attendant who was trying to look anywhere but at Aart) ”No sugar for me thanks. Zef?”

“No thanks.”

(Attendant, still looking at Zef) “Three euro’s please.”

(Aart pulling the change from his pocket and waving it up towards her face) “Here you go!” (Feeling really annoyed, but pasting a sickly sweet smile on his face).

Having said all that, I think fans of the fantasy genre will like this book. The author does have some great moments of action and drama. Especially in the battle below the waves between, elves, dwarfs, dragons, fairies and gods and goddesses. But for me, the plot line was too mixed up and there were far too many characters.

 

Now let’s hear from the Unleashed One:

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Greetings, No Labels here!

When I first got this work, it was originally entitled “Brisingamen” and the cover was slightly different.

I am a fan of this updated cover.  The lady’s face in the background (as a watermark effect) gives a mythical aspect to it, almost an “I’ve got my eye on you” air.  I also like the accompanying book trailer.

However, I will place the synopsis in print as well:

Synopsis: There is a World not too far Away … Beneath the north sea a land of magic lies undetected. The lives of many are drawn inexorably closer together in a race against time, as both energy companies and evil beings attempt to destroy the magic which is protecting not just this land but all worlds. The unwitting protagonists have no idea of how suddenly and irrevocably their lives are about to change. It is a race against time to try and recover the lost necklace, Brisingamen, which holds the ancient power of the Goddess Freya, and to prevent the undersea drilling from taking place. Are Aart, Matthias, Gemma and Dirck up to the challenges they now must face? Here there be Dragons, and all manner of Creatures.

All of the elements are here for the makings of a wonderful story. The key to these elements is how well they are presented and executed.

Let’s journey to see if they were meshed well or if they remained separate and foreign to each other.

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Smooth sailing (no turbulence here): Also known as strengths.

The author did a great job with spelling and grammar.

The resolution to this read was also satisfactory, leaving just enough lingering to predict that a sequel may be in this book’s future.

The author gets finger snaps (poetry speak for “an awesome job”) with physical descriptions, particularly when talking about the magic world and the battle scenes.

In addition, there was quite a bit of conflict that needed addressing, so I give the author a ton of credit for keeping the heightened sense of urgency on “red alert”.

 

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Huge waves (freak storm): Opportunites

There were some elements, I felt, which needed some tweaking.

Dangling hooks: I was drawn in by the presentation of Aart, Gemma, Dirck, and Matthias. However, the hook suffered because of the style in which the story was presented (expanded on in next section).

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Erratic style of the narrative: For me, there were too many time and location shifts within the same chapter. It made it very difficult for me to connect with a character and his/her story as well as keep all of the action connected with each other.

I think a story with this much conflict to cover should have devoted half a chapter or at least one chapter, so I could connect with one character before switching me immediately to the next character.

Lack of fully engaging with the characters: I like to be able to fully connect with the characters that I’m reading about, yet the presentation of Brisingamen made it difficult.

Instead of feeling as if I was at an intimate affair, I felt like I was at a casual networking party. It marks the difference between getting to know someone and knowing someone for just one night.

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Too many extra characters: I understand that more characters had to be brought in to heighten the ultimate showdown for Brisingamen, but there were so many put in the fray one could barely keep up with what clan one was with and what was his/her role.

Sometimes, when one inserts too many characters, the richness of the plot can get lost in the crossfire. In this work, the loss of plot serves to dampen the potential this work has.

The Overall Verdict:

Vision Unleashed are both in agreement in giving this work a very soft 7 of 10 stars.

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I have an appreciation for the unique, love for all types of art, and fierce attractions to brilliant intellectuals (from book smarts to street smarts). Lover of humanity but feel humans have lost their way, just trying to stay true to myself as conformity threatens to take me away. Simply one head, many crowns: Author. Reviewer. Columnist.

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