Where Honesty Never Ends.
Acrosstica by Jim Ozee (available via Smashwords)
Blurb: Inspired commentary on faith, religion, and self-discovery.
Greetings, everyone! It is our pleasure to present you with our second joint review. This time, we take a closer look at Acrosstica. Acrosstica is a small collection of poetry that reflects on one’s views on faith, religion, and self discovery. Not only is it that, but each poem adopts the style of acrostic poetry.
Taken from Enchanting Learning, this is the simplest way to describe what acrostic poems are:
Acrostic poems are simple poems in which each the first letter of each line forms a word or phrase (vertically). An acrostic poem can describe the subject or even tell a brief story about it.
Did this style make it more interesting or did Acrosstica meet challenges? For more, we will first delve into the mind of “Mr. Controversy”.
For fans of acrostic poetry, this is a paradise for those who love reading the hidden messages within these pages. For those who believe that “Variety is the Spice of Life”, however, this poetry series is repetitive and could very well turn you off.
Reading these poems, I have immediately noticed a couple of things:
-Lack of punctuation marks, which are sorely needed and necessary (to determine the beginning and ending of sentences, emphasis of writing, etc.).
-Lack of extra eyes to point out the aforementioned lack of punctuation marks. Also, needing said extra eyes for sentence structure for effectiveness in the delivery of messages in the poems.
Honestly speaking, the poems do have potential. They simply need Tender Loving Care so that those who read the poetry can become enamored in as well as embrace what they are reading.
Sadly, the noticed items have prevented me from actually understanding what I am reading; compromising my ability to enjoy what was written by this young man.
Greetings, No Labels here! The main things that drew me to read Acrosstica was the title and the theme. I like to hear about one’s thoughts on faith, religion, and self discovery, particularly if there are lessons in those thoughts and if the overall ambiance is uplifting. I didn’t even equate Acrosstica with acrostic poetry until I started reading.
Although I applaud the intent, I was seeking more concreteness in the structure and the content. Yes, acrostic poems are easy in construct but the key is whether it can be executed effectively. A strong acrostic poem has all the lines able to relate to each other, and all those lines revert back to the original theme.
Take for example, J.D. Ozee’s poem, Guardian, where the overall intent is to amplify Tough Love. Once it gets to the “Love” portion, the poem loses its’ cohesiveness:
Laughing at my desire to blame
Once, I would see a gaze sincere
Vanity now stripped away
Earnest for your presence near
Like Mr. Controversy, I would like to see more punctuation to mark the beginning and end of thoughts. More importantly, however, for me, everything has to tie in. For me, the last two lines don’t have much to do with the first two lines. Plus, whose presence does the writer want near? Sincerity? Love itself? Guidance? Because at first, it seems as if the writer wants vanity back from how it’s conveyed, yet I sense it’s not what he was really trying to say. It is a bit confusing.
I’d like to compare this to an excerpt from one of my poems in Reflections of Soul entitled The End is The Beginning. In one section of the poem, I am discussing elements that caused one’s arrested development using the acrostic style of conveyance:
Excerpt from The End is The Beginning
I can choose to procrastinate,
but that’s what I did before-
whored away my principles,
causing my arrested development.
Manic in the way I approached things
Obtuse in the way I was acting
Nonchalant in how I was treating conflict
Ignorant of the toxic effects of berating myself
Chronically too dependent on others’ approval
Abusing myself in any way
Just to ease the pain.
Subject: Arrested development
Following stanza: Detailing the events causing the arrested development
Letters in bold: Detailing the source of the arrested development. The letters serve to spell out the person’s name.
All of the elements tie in to each other.
Acrosstica reminds me of a very small snack, possessing tasty elements but not enough to consider one full.
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